This is an example of a good introduction. It is short, simple and conveys all
the necessary information to the person reading it. The introduction addresses
the audience directly, it tells you what they will be speaking about
“government’s move to abolish January examinations” and what
their opinion of it is “it is nothing to be afraid of, it has our best
interests at heart”.
Do not try and include your points in the introduction. You can make a brief
general one, or subtle references that suggest at points but leave your main
points for the central text where you can elaborate on them better. Below is
point one from the Spider plan expanded. Read it carefully, then read it with
the comments to see what can constitute a good point in a Writing to Persuade
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her first point.
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|The abolition of January exams means that all exams for our GCSE qualifications will take place at the end of the summer term, in June and July. Is this really a problem?|
I can see by the looks in some of your faces that this thought is utterly distasteful to you. Why would you want more exams in June and July when you could split them between January and the Summer?
Let me give you some facts and figures. Raise your hands if
you study History, Geography or another humanities course. 40% of this year group study those subjects and those are the only courses that offered January examinations. Consequently those are the only subjects affected by the removal of January examinations. So out of our 300 strong year group only 120 of you will have ONE extra exam in the summer.
Do you know what that means? Last year I spent the whole year revising, from September to Christmas for my January exams andthen January to June for my Summer ones. It is such an inefficient way to work. You need time to rest and process the new information your teachers are teaching you, not constantly revising the old stuff. With this new arrangement you can actually spend your school year learning and begin your revision after January for
your summer examinations. Not only will this increase coursework grades as you will have more time to spend on your subjects and hone essay writing skills but it will increase work ethic and enjoyment of school as you also
have time to relax.Who wants to be stressed as soon as they walk in the first day of term? We all were, there is no denying that. But now we are not! Thanks to this decision we are no longer required to be working machines, we are allowed time to relax and become more rounded individuals as we can pursue things we enjoy doing
beyond school. Having the exams altogether means a stress free rest of the year, and teachers will be able to prepare much better for lessons when they don’t have to worry about the January exams which always disturb everything.